I’ve been
playing with the text of an early Latin Collect which came up recently.
Dirigat
corda nostra quaesumus Domine tuae miserationis operatio, quia tibi sine te
placere non possumus comes out (in the word order of the modern English
Collect) as something like Lord, because without you we cannot be acceptable to
you, may the activity of your compassion, we ask, direct our hearts which
Cranmer’s seventeenth century revisers rendered O God, forasmuch as without
thee we are not able to please thee, mercifully grant that thy Holy Spirit may
in all things direct and rule our hearts.
Both the
translation process and the way this has been ‘improved’ by the reference to
the Holy Spirit is clear thus:
Source /
Prayer Book
Lord / O God
because /
forasmuch as
without you /
without thee
we cannot / we are not able to
be acceptable
to you / please thee
may the activity
of your compassion / mercifully
we ask / grant that
- / thy Holy
Spirit
- / may in
all things
direct /
direct
- / and rule
our hearts /
our hearts.
Leaving that
to one side, my playing has tried to create new prayers which capture what the Latin
originators might have been encouraging us to feel towards:
Stir our hearts,
Lord, we pray,
because we
cannot come to you
without your
mercy at work in us
or even
Entwine our
desires
with your
mercy, O Lord,
that you
might delight in them.
Source / First new prayer
Source / First new prayer
Lord / Lord
because /
because
without you /
without your
we
cannot / we cannot
be acceptable
to you / come to you
may the
activity of your compassion / mercy
at work in us
we ask /
we pray
direct /
stir
our hearts /
our hearts
Source /
Second new prayer [negative ‘because without you we cannot be acceptable to you’
shifted to a positive ‘that you might delight in them’]
Lord / O Lord
because /
that
without you /
you
we
cannot / might
be acceptable
to you / delight in them
may the
activity of your compassion / with your mercy
we ask /
[this is only
implied]
direct /
entwine
our hearts /
our desires
Meanwhile, the largess to the poor is the feeding of the hungry as one of the corporal works of mercy in the Charlotte Bronte memorial window in St Michael's, Haworth.
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